Is this too long? Are my reasons cogent? here we go...
I would like to appeal for admission to UCLA in light of the personal hardships I have faced during my high school years. In 2001, I moved to the United States along with my family. Unfortunately, after I have attended the eighth grade in America for ten months, a misfortune struck our family. My mom was diagnosed with achalasia cardia, a disorder which causes her to throw up shortly after she had her meal. Since it became almost impossible for her to eat, the doctors recommended that mom try a surgical therapy. However, as we could not afford the cost of surgery in United States, we had to fly back in 2002 to settle for a less expensive alternative in Myanmar. Having to go back to a country where dictators control everything, my dream was temporarily shattered. Though my parents sent me to a private school to be in touch with English language, I had to transfer out after a year because my family can no longer pay for both my moms medical bills and my school fees. Thus, I ended up going to a public school in my sophomore year.
In addition to the hardships, I would like to appeal over the sophomore grades I reported in my original application because of the unusual grading system public schools in Myanmar use. Although all the subjects were out of a hundred points, for subjects like Myanmar and English, seventy-five to a hundred is a distinction and for subjects like Mathematics, Chemistry, Biology and Physics, eighty to a hundred is a distinction. (For verification, I have requested and included the converted grades from my Myanmar school along with this appeal letter).
By the end of my sophomore year, mom had recovered to a certain extent from her surgery. Eager to study in United States, my sister and I asked for mom and dads permission and gathered the courage to come back here alone. Although we were happy to be in United States again, we had to face many problems. It was hard for us to take necessary shots for school at the health center, take English Proficiency Test at the School District, and even go to supermarkets to buy food or water because we did not have a car. Since I could not attend high school until I have all the required shots, I was late to attend my classes. I also had to retake Chemistry and Physics in my junior and senior year because my high school did not give me credit for the classes I took in Myanmar. All these hardships and the effect of having to move from school to school every year had greatly impacted my academic history. I therefore would like the admission officers to reconsider me for admission to UCLA.