<p>‘Think before you leap’ is a hackneyed adage that has been passed down throughout generations. But do these lists of pros and cons suffice for a decision that may very well resonate their effects throughout the human’s life? The examples of mother Teresa and the 26/11 Mumbai attack bolster the idea of making important decisions guided by one’s intuition.</p>
<p>Mother Teresa, a selfless missionary, managed to ameliorate the pains of thousands of desolate humans. This figure of inspiration had a choice: road to a comfortable life without hurdles or the life full of hardships. Thinking logically, most of the people would be driven away from the lackluster that the second option offered. But mother Teresa let her feelings decide her path of life; the same feelings of helplessness she felt when she saw her fellow human beings deprived of the basic commodities. The fear of the unknown did not deter her tenacity and today, she stands as a beacon of hope for the despaired.</p>
<p>The importance of acting on one’s intuition rather then waiting to gather information from every second source, pertains to every fragment of the human society.This can be displayed by the incident preceding the Mumbai attacks. Few days before the ghastly and brutal attacks on innocent lives, the Indian coastal guards had sensed some aberrant activity. Instead of acting on their gut feelings to check the site of activity, they let their superiors decide. The time they took gave the terrorists a golden opportunity to infiltrate the country resulting to the deaths of hundreds of civilians.</p>
<p>Thus the above examples bolster the sentiment that there are times when people should let their feelings decide for them.</p>
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<li>The adage is “look before you leap.”</li>
<li>what “lists of pros and cons”?</li>
<li>The plural pronoun has no plural antecedent in sentence 2: “their effects”</li>
<li><p>Fine thesis/road map</p></li>
<li><p>“lackluster” is an adjective</p></li>
<li><p>you need details to establish that she had a choice of lifestyles. This graf doesn’t show any actual knowledge of Mother Teresa.</p></li>
<li><p>How did “feelings of helplessness” and “fear” let her decide to help the poor? Illogical (and remember: this is a reasoning test)</p></li>
<li><p>End this graf with a reminder of your thesis–link back to it</p></li>
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<p>(no time for point-by-point for the rest. I’d give it an 8 out of 12)</p>
<p>The question in the first paragraph is “iffy” for me, the question doesn’t really add to the essay. If you could some how change the question into something more relatable ( you don’t have a list of pros and cons as mentioned above) </p>
<p>The second paragraph has more of a juvenile tone. Sentence structure and vocab doesn’t really impress me as much as the first. Plus there is no transition between the first and second paragraph. It’s changes abruptly. And the conclusion is weak… “Thus…” Is equivalent to "this is my conclusion… ". I would edit it. </p>
<p>Overall, has potential. 8/12</p>
<p>@marvin100 and @thatdudeinhs
So what if I change the sentence structure to <em>But does making a list of pros and cons suffice for a decision that may very well resonate its effects throughout the human’s life?</em>
Or should I change the whole thing completely?
So expand the body and conclusion.
Thank you for helping me out : D</p>
<p>the problem is you’re stating that there is a list of “pros and cons” however you do not mention any “list” in your essay thus making it irrelevant.</p>
<p>I see this as a great improvement to ur last essay … overall this is a 7 … try to even write more cuz it has been proven that length matters on the SAT essay </p>