<p>I liked both essays. You are a good writer. However, I would not dwell too much on the word ‘ignorance’ as much as you did in the short essay.</p>
<p>“My ignorance comes from not knowing how much more I can learn; how fine a journalist I can be.”</p>
<p>I don’t understand it either. How about making it a positive message.
How about:
“I would like to explore myself as an individual and look at areas where I think I need reinforcement; for example, my shyness which tends to overcome me at times. I would like to think that there is no limit to what I can do when I am determined to do it.”
Then the last few sentences after that make sense. I would remove the words ‘my very worthy’ from the last sentence. You should let your readers determine if it is a very worth goal.</p>
<p>The last sentence of your long essay does not make sense. It needs more explanation.</p>