for me this essay is very different, but maybe because I am international student and the way how Americans write “why something” essays is different.
the topic was all about of writing an essay, why you chose NYU over any other school and why you are interested in some programs at NYU and no other. you were supposed to tell why you chose to apply to one particular program over another and how NYU would benefit from you, and you from NYU. I feel like your essay is very good and descriptive and vivid, but not really on topic that they asked you to write about. But I hope that i am not right and your essay is just brilliant. Because yeah, for me it looks like a piece of art, but that is an essay saying 'woah ah oh NYU is JUST P E R F E C T" and I guess, they are so done listening how much do you love it, because they wait for you to tell them why YOU are a perfect person to fill NYU like a missing puzzle.
But honestly, this is only my own opinion. Outside of the USA (and from people that I know who also applied), WHY NYU essay is kind of a “motivation letter” that states why they should desire to have you. But excuse me in advance, I may not be right. However, I like your essay so much and I wish you best of luck! :-*