Hi there! I got in ED1 to NYU (although not for Tisch) but I have a pretty good Idea of what a successful “Why NYU” essay should look like (after all, I did get into Stern). Overall, I thought your essay was solid except for one key feature. You seemed to describe why you liked NYC over NYU. When I went to the NYU open house, the admissions counselors stressed that they get hundreds of “Why NYU” essays that talk about NYC instead of NYU specifically. They even said that said that “if you love NYC that much and talk about it in your essay, that doesn’t tell us you want to go to NYU. There are plenty of other colleges in NYC you can go to”. That being said, your essay was still solid and depending on the other parts of your application, you definitely still have a chance of making it in. It’s just that this essay probably wont help you that much.