<p>“The campus was enormous, it was beautiful, it was like an attractive female who amazed me with all her beauty and made me her blind lover.”</p>
<p>-Huh? A blind lover? Why would an attractive female make you blind? I don’t get it. And to be perfectly honest, I wouldn’t submit this essay. Everyone here knows how wonderful BU is, that’s why we still have tens of thousands of applicants every year even with a $50,000 cost. Admissions doesn’t need you to tell them that. This essay would hurt you in the end, not only because of bad grammar, but because it’s boring and doesn’t sound professional. Admissions wants to know WHY they should accept YOU; they already know you like the school otherwise you wouldn’t apply. If no one has told you this before, I will tell you now: you are supposed to sell yourself on a college application. “Oh wow, Jimmy has done research? Is published? Has a 3.8? I want him at BU!” not “Oh wow, Jimmy likes BU! Awesome! Let’s bring him on down!”</p>