<p>Well right off the bat, I don’t think you should have picked 2 personal experience examples, let alone having them as your only examples. In your next essay, try using a historical or literary example. Don’t use sentences such as “volunteer work is an example of this idea.” Instead, mention maybe something like “Volunteer work is an example of an activity that brings satisfaction, even though it does not bring money.” </p>
<p>(My analysis is based on the Rocket Review Essay writing section).</p>
<p>For the most part the rest is fine, but I don’t see any SAT big SAT vocab words. I would give it an 8-9.</p>
<p>Also, please grade my essay =)</p>
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