<p>Swimmer, we are all human. We have brains and we can read and write and are probably very proficient in English. We can discern good writing from bad writing, good ideas from most likely bad ideas, and some of us are even fairly adept at generating good writing. There is no reason why the OP shouldn’t get opinions about his essay from other people, especially those who have already gone through the college admissions process. No one is claiming to be an expert, we are just trying to help.</p>