Can someone read over my readmittance letter?

Applying to College
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A successful appeal must do several things:

  1. show that you understand what went wrong
  2. show that you take responsibility for the academic failures
  3. show that you have a plan for future academic success
  4. in a broad sense, show that you are being honest with yourself and the committee

Here are some examples:

http://collegeapps.about.com/od/Academic-Dismissals/a/Sample-Appeal-Letter-For-An-Academic-Dismissal.htm

Some of this is general, and some specific to your situation.

  1. search this topic on CC and you will see many other posts on academic appeals
  2. Make sure your letter states what the issue was that caused you to have academic difficulties
  3. Did you talk to your professors/dean of students about the issue?
  4. Did you make use of the many resources your school has? if not, why not?
  5. Find out what those resources are…e.g. counseling center, talking to professors, talking to your adviser, withdrawing from class, talking to dean, maybe taking incompletes,
  6. State how you would use those in the future
  7. How are you addressing what caused the issue? Have you addressed family issues?
  8. Think about if you should continue at college, or take a break.
  9. How is your college funded? Will that continue?
  10. Why didn’t you know that you were doing poorly? Do you not look at your grades online?

In general, keep in mind what the college wants…they want students who can succeed. They need to know that you understand what the issue was, know now the resources that you can use, how the problems is resolved so you will not have academic issues in the future.

So in your case, put more examples into what happened your freshman year second semester. Your family broke up…I assume your parents got divorced. How did that effect you? Did you talk to anyone in the counseling center at college? why not? Did you talk to your professors? why not? did you get a tutor? Why not?

Then discuss all the specific tools your college has that you would use to do better…both for your emotional/mental health and your academics. here are example of the types of things …but find out what they are called at your college.

http://talk.collegeconfidential.com/college-life/1920853-college-is-a-step-up-from-hs-16-tips-on-doing-well-in-college.html

Revise your letter and repost and we will look at it again.