Completed essay, anyone up for a read?

<p>^it’s not “proofreading” help we need, gosh. we learned all that in elementary school and i can honestly say i don’t think i’ve ever misspelled a word on a formal essay or even timed essays on ap tests or whatever.</p>

<p>it’s advice on our ideas and topics and what we focused on, etc. that we want, just wondering if it’s appropriate, cliche, overdone, or just right…our parents can’t give us advice like that. yeah i never share essays with my friends either b/c of that “cross-pollination” you mentioned. and my GC isn’t super-experienced either.</p>

<p>so that’s why we come to CC searching out those who have already undergone this process and succeeded…that’s why we put ourselves out here despite the risks, because other ppl we know personally can’t always offer the kind of insights we really want.</p>