Thanks for the comment! Yes, I did realize, while typing this, that I had a bunch of spelling mistakes. I will give more attention to spellings from now on.
Besides, the spelling, do you have anything that you would like to tell me as an advice? Such as structure, time management, spelling, paragraph length, etc.
Unfortunately, I would have to disagree with your scoring, not to depreciate your helpful insight. The reason for my stance can be found on this following link:
Besides, his (or her) essay was 467 words, and my essay was 449 words, so length difference wasn’t not that much.
Looking back at my essay, I feel as if I could’ve shorten my 2nd paragraph a bit to let me have enough time to finish my 3rd paragraph and conclusion. What do you think?
P.S. this may be a irrelevant note, but all the details mentioned in my 2nd paragraph was all fake - I made them all up.