@Colleger222 I hope by now you have found some help with the essays. You are doing the right thing by getting started on these earlier rather than later. It would be more helpful to you if you found someone in your school (guidance counselor, English teacher, etc.) who can review and guide you through the revisions in real time. In general, my opinion is that the first essay has more problems than the second, because I really do not gain any knowledge about how you tick from it. The second essay says a lot more about you.