<p>Well, I read the next round of essay by my daughter and may I say, she must have listened. She kept the topic despite my suggestion that perhaps she should try another, but she worked it right this time. It needed some tweaking, change a word here and there, beef up the closing paragraph (standard weak point) but in my opinion, it was 1000% better, real, and it should work. Not about her sport, but about her summer job, which was actually somewhat related to her sport.</p>