<p>I think your essay is great :D. I can’t find anything wrong with it in particular. I do agree with cheerios that maybe you should expand on your examples a bit more. </p>
<p>I hate to plug myself here, but if you want to read an over-the-top kind of essay that I typed without any kind of time restrictions just for kicks and maybe some inspiration, here it is: </p>
<p><a href=“http://talk.collegeconfidential.com/13714868-post200.html[/url]”>http://talk.collegeconfidential.com/13714868-post200.html</a></p>