<p>You might want to pick more objective examples! Your tone and “support” in the paragraph about stem cells seemed a little too subjective. I would also go for a literary example if you can (maybe instead of science). Also with every paragraph, I would connect it back to answering the question on a deeper level; not just that it evidences it, but what that evidence means! You had a a very strong closing. Keep up the good work! (9/12)</p>