Read these tips if you haven’t yet. The second one sounds better to me. @bjkmom has some good advice about what you are trying to accomplish.
http://talk.collegeconfidential.com/college-essays/2003258-essay-tips-to-consider.html#latest
Read these tips if you haven’t yet. The second one sounds better to me. @bjkmom has some good advice about what you are trying to accomplish.
http://talk.collegeconfidential.com/college-essays/2003258-essay-tips-to-consider.html#latest