@dedex13: I’ve read the little bit of your daughter’s intro that you published and, frankly, I think it’s fine because it is apparent quickly and clearly that is is about the color yellow. There was no confusion for me; I did not pick up a racial overtone at all. However, I would suggest that she drop the warning; it starts the reader off with an alarming note when your daughter’s tone should be casual and light. UChicago is interested in her thinking and what it tells them about her, as well as her writing ability. If she can do this deftly, it could work well.