The idea is to use “Show, not just tell.” If you want to say it motivated you to be more sensitive to others or whatever, you need real examples of what you do. It’s not, “then I decided to study harder.” Not, “that’s why I want to be a doctor.”
And frankly, writing about something unpleasant, mom upset and all, is not what adcoms need to learn about you. And the more emphasis you put on the others, their story, their feelings, the more problematic for you, as the applicant.
No personal statement is meant to “describe” this sort of stuff. It’s about what you implemented and your traits. You can describe an argument in one sentence, as the turnaround point or impetus for your changes. But the point of the essay is your traits, what you can “show” you do. NOT revealing private family troubles at length.
Not the fight specifics, not your mother’s two sorts of tears.
This is NOT like a schooll essay, where the teacher wants to know you got the format right and answered the prompt. And knows you. This is part of what introduces you to adcoms, a good narrative that makes them nod and smile and see you in the class.
There’s got to be a better topic or angle. Andit needs to be college-relevant.