January 2010 Writing Thread

<p>here is what i thought of the agency one</p>

<p>i felt like A and E were saying the same thing but E made it unnecessarily verbose</p>

<p>the original phrasing was like the agency reported(or w.e) that by enforcing state regs, pollution levels were reduced</p>

<p>thats perfectly acceptable in my book (altho i oculdv gotten the orignal wording wrong</p>

<p>contrast with E</p>

<p>by …, it had succeeded in reducing levels…</p>

<p>first of all, everyone knows what it is; we do not need a pronoun referring back to the subject
2ndly, succeeded in reducing?!?!</p>

<p>come on, you can just say reduced lol</p>

<p>edit: -0 with 9-10 is at least 790 lmao</p>

<p>EDIT 2: -1 (maybe -2 depending on the consensus on the agency question)</p>

<p>i probably wrote an 11 essay but 2400 hopes arnt too bright…</p>

<p>So far, -1 writing, and 11E or 12E. Looking sexy.</p>

<p>“…will result in your scores being cancelled.”
^ I was assuming the ellipsis included a subject that “will result,” so the rest was a separate clause… but I suppose that the verb phrase “will result in” must be followed by a nominal or object of the preposition thus making “being” a gerund in any case, so I concede haha.</p>

<p>btw, my English teacher recently told us that it is now considered proper or standard to always include an ‘s’ after a word with an apostrophe showing posession-- have you heard anything similar? I personally hate writing “___s’s”</p>

<p>charles’s yea u do and u always had to</p>

<p>the stags’ antlers are sharp</p>

<p>or did i totally miss ur point</p>

<p>darnit i missed the whales question. i knew swam didnt sound right! i used like 4 mins on that question and just put E. and then i probably mixed the next one about the camel. but those are the only 2 i missed, and unfortunately its not experimental bc i had 4 math sections</p>

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<p>I never repeat the “s” in such contexts.</p>

<p>was the profound influences thing in the last section?</p>

<p>silverturtle, what did you put the for agency question and what was your reasoning?</p>

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<p>superaznnerd,</p>

<p>You can’t take off the object and use that as evidence: my point is that the verb’s transivity renders “for” wrong. All of the dictionary sources I’ve check thus far support this idea.</p>

<p>Can somebody please write down the full sentence for the photography one?? Because many people do not seem to remember it!!</p>

<p>superaznnerd u shud keep ur trap shut </p>

<p>silverturtle is a legend on this thread</p>

<p>he made threads about writing
dont querstion the writing god</p>

<p>question 21 is wrong it aint no error</p>

<p>silverturtle knows whats upp</p>

<p>every1 email collegeboard abt 21
silver i missed 21 too we can both cash in some writing section 800’s man</p>

<p>^but we don’t even know who’s right yet</p>

<p>about the agency: as best I can remember the sentence; “The agency reported that by enforcing state regulations, pollution levels were reduced to acceptable levels.”</p>

<p>My reasoning was that “by enforcing state regulations” was a participial phrase and that as such it would more successfully describe the agency rather than pollution levels (somehow I can’t picture pollution levels enforcing state regulations). I believe I chose answer E, if that was the one that changed the sentence to “The agency reported that by enforcing state regulations, it had succeeded in reducing pollution to acceptable levels.”</p>

<p>I may be wrong, but that’s my two cents…</p>

<p>Note [provide</a> in English - Google Dictionary](<a href=“http://www.google.com/dictionary?langpair=en|en&q=provide&hl=en&aq=f:]provide”>http://www.google.com/dictionary?langpair=en|en&q=provide&hl=en&aq=f:).</p>

<p>The entries make clear that “provide for” is not the appropriate phrasal verb and is intransitive. The verb in question #21 is being used transitively and in a way semantically different from the meanings offered for “provide for” in any dictionary.</p>

<p>We must use the transitive verb form of “provide,” which has no intrinsic, phrasal preposition. We use “to” in order to link to the indirect objects, the photographers.</p>

<p>I don’t really feel like petitioning again, though. :(</p>

<p>I agree with cjester about the “agency” question.</p>

<p>^@antonio, funny you should use my name as an example; “charles’s”</p>

<p>I hate writing that second ‘s’… must it be pronounced as well if it is always required? Or if it is not required may it be excluded in pronunciation?</p>

<p>crap!</p>

<p>i put E at first but then went back to A cus i thought E was too verbose</p>

<p>is 790 in range for -2(or maybe still -1 :D) and 11 essay?</p>

<p>would you, silverturtle, consider an essay(not so neat) but with 3 examples (Gatsby, Lyndon B Johnson, financial market crash of 2007) as a 11? mechanics were fine and i threw in just a teeny amount of high profile words :D</p>

<p>would you consider Jay Gatsby as a victim of hte pressures of time?</p>

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<p>I would have to read the essay. But with three well-developed examples and acceptable diction, 10+ is very likely.</p>

<p>well you would say “charleses” dictionary wouldnt you</p>

<p>charles dictionary??!?!</p>

<p>EDIT: well i could see the reasoning behind cjester’s, err, reasoning but</p>

<p>i would still argue that hte original phrasing was more succinct and, for the most part, free of grammatical errors</p>

<p>does anyone remember waht they put for question 13, the one immediately preceding the agency?</p>

<p>i put A A to round it off…</p>

<p>I noticed several prepositional mistakes throughout the two big sections of writing that I took, but I took them one after another (tests 5 and 6… and writing is my least favorite section, yay!), and I honestly don’t remember whether the resources question was one of them. Like… basically everyone else, I feel like I’d probably be able to remember my answer if I were given the entire question.</p>

<p>As of right now, I kinda buy silverturtle’s argument, but I’m not sure if College Board was looking for something so nuanced with the question. It really would be great if someone could remember the entire question and post it on here, though.</p>

<p>Also, I agree with cjester and silverturtle about the agency question.</p>