<p>Well the most important factor in writing an essay is making them “feel” for you, that is to say pull on their emotion heart strings. I would recommend focusing on two things. First is helping other people: Delivering Pizza to the homeless, being an alcoholic who is now helping other’s during AA meetings, being an like an adopted son to a couple who can’t have children, working at a blood bank in some third world country; all those stories worked. So refocus your life in a context of helping others. Secondly try to talk about how much you love being a scholar, this is a school you are applying to you. From what I have read very few people write essays explicitly starting how much they love learning, and the reasons they choose their program. Lastly try to reduce the content, use small words, make it very light and easy to read. </p>