<p>A bit late to the party, and I’m not sure if my advice is worthwhile to listen to since I didn’t get into Berkeley.</p>
<p>Prompt #1: Answered the question, but overall the experience had doesn’t seem too relatable to your major. Though I would assume trying to explain your interest in statistics to be very difficult.</p>
<p>Prompt #2: I think you have missed question in this point. The first half doesn’t seem to relate to person you’ve become in the later in the half. I think you’re correct in believing that you were listing your struggles instead of showing how those struggles shaped you. Often times one singular experience doesn’t shape who we are, nor could we adequately explain our growth in the length given. For me I focused on 2~3 qualities I want to best show to UC admissions, and focused on one particular experience on how it shaped me in gaining those two qualities. I would personally either stick with family story or a single influential club, but not both.</p>
<p>I would like to comment that I wouldn’t be brave enough to post my personal prompts for critique, so good on you to taking steps to making your application look better for next time. This video is a bit old, but it helped me out a lot trying to gain a sense of what admissions office was looking for <a href=“Applying to UC: The Personal Statement 2007 - YouTube”>Applying to UC: The Personal Statement 2007 - YouTube; .</p>