<p>^ Yea, I agree with Tortfeasor. It comes across as way too academic… and while that might make sense to do, that’s not the purpose of an admission essay, and certainly not one of an appeal letter. You want to come across as genuine, understanding of your lack of admissions the first time, and most importantly: unique. You spit out a lot of facts and number, but I wouldn’t remember this appeal in the stacks that I’m theoretically reading. I would suggest sitting down at the computer, with no grades/transcripts/thesaurus, and just write why you think you’ve been overlooked and why you should still be admitted. A personal story, experience, etc are the best ways to be remembered, not a list of facts or accomplishments. Personality is key!</p>