<p>In addition to the comments already posted, I suggest you begin with a more positive first sentence. Think of the situation as this: admission committee members are looking to fill its class with good students. You have good news for them!</p>
<p>In addition to the comments already posted, I suggest you begin with a more positive first sentence. Think of the situation as this: admission committee members are looking to fill its class with good students. You have good news for them!</p>