My potential college essay?

Very good advice in the post above until the last sentence, in my opinion.

The last sentence of the above post: “Your essays are your chance to knit all those pieces together to show the AOs the big picture, the things that you see as making you a great fit for their college.” This quoted sentence is the portion of the post above with which I disagree.

@Cloudybay23 (two posts above) hit the nail on the head. Excellent advice presented in a succinct manner.