@schoolisfunforme I don’t think risk taking is really needed much and I think a whole paragraph to that is a bit much, but it’s your choice and every writer knows what works for them, so if that’s what works for you, you know what’s best. I think it’s important to develop your “voice” so they’re not reading just a boring essay. Use powerful diction like in your rhetorical analysis for example “___ masters the use of ___” etc and get your own tone in there.