Hey @champj
Thanks so much!
I do have a few doubts though…
Diction: I did try to throw in a couple of sat word’s there, but i resisted, thinking it would be jargon. My textbook (Kaplan) , specifically mentions no difficult words or jargon.
Structure: With regard to question on paragraphs, the minimum paragraphs college board recommends, is four, and the maximum is five. Never use more than five or your flow will be disrupted. Less than four and the reader looses track. Although my teach won’t give more than 6 if the essay isn’t five paragraph, I strongly recommend 4 since it saves time. Many sample high scoring essays on college board have 4. Five is okay, but i don’t believe it raises your score, it only wastes time. That why you found errors in my work (I couldn’t proofread.).
Even if we think logically, not even the smartest students can write a five paragraph essay, in 25 minutes, the college board does not expect us to work miracles. 4 paragraphs also provides depth. (Personally i think i could have removed the second example to provide depth for the third.).
The most important point is that the sat values depth, over quantity. As long as your example is deeply developed, and is well chosen, there’s no reason you’ll get below 10 (Even if someones grammar sucks).
Reg. I believe: I understand not to use an exclamation, its kinda weird for this test, but i don’t understand why not to us “I believe”. The essay is about our personal opinion, surely they won’t cut points for trying to share our view. It is an argumentative but a personal one.
I strongly suggest you go through sample essay either of college board or a reputed book like barron’s, princeton, and Kaplan. You will understand all my points then…
Best of luck to you too!