<p>An 8. It seems like you’re going off topic and you’re not really answering how conscience is a more powerful force than money. You also have superfluous information like how Martin Luther King Died. So what? How does that show that conscience is a more powerful indicator than money? You should try to focus on the question more.</p>
<p>Also, it seems like you rusheed the 2nd and 3rd paragraphs. Here’s a tip. If you can’t think of a 3rd example, just do 2. I did that for my sat essay and I got a 10 on it. Many people have done only 2 examples and they’ve got 12’s on the essay. The last 2 examples should really enforce how conscience overpowers fame money or power. You need to be repetitive ( I know that ap lang. frowns upon this) and solid to enforce your point.</p>