Please someone comment and edit! I'd like to know what people think. Thanks!

<p>As the daughter of an alumna I grew up with stories of my mother’s years at Barnard. I patiently listened to her chronicle tales of her inspiring Professor Dalton, her nurturing advisors and the madcap adventures in the city all at her disposal. As a skeptical teenager I appreciated all the nostalgia but was Barnard really the right place for me? And so the process began… The interview, visiting the college and having the college visit my school, talking to current students and graduates all helped point me in the same direction. Barnard is the place for me. How could one not fall in love with a school that has a population of independent, artistic and vibrant women? A school that has graduated women from entertainers Joan Rivers and Cynthia Nixon to inspirational authors Jeanette Walls and Anna Quindlen. A school that offers nine ways of knowing as a fundamental basis and guides you as you branch out in a specific area of study. The option of belonging to a smaller, nurturing environment while having access to a larger university and all their resources is perfectly in synch with how I am most comfortable learning and socializing. While still excited to compare college experiences with my Mother, I am eager to forge my own path, eat my own midnights breakfast, and build my own connections with the amazing professors at Barnard.
is this less generic?</p>