<p>Wow! That essay is very creative and thoughtful!</p>
<p>Stanford is well known to be looking for that “sincerely nice factor” in a person. So do you think the essay would come across as something written by a sincerely nice person?
When I am at the campus, and based on my son’s experiences & stories, it always amazes me how they picked all these over/high achieving kids who are very nice at the same time.</p>
<p>If you ever get to the committee, you may be known as the “poo kid.” That would probably help, I would imagine. Better than being known as a “4.0 kid” or “athletic kid” or “sciencey kid” or something that thousands of applicants already are.</p>
<p>^^
Well, I didn’t want to sound phony. I figured everyone would write that way.</p>
<p>Plus, the essay implies that I’m considerate if you read deeply into it… I guess.</p>
<p>There’s a difference on what the writer thinks of his/her essay and what a reader thinks of it. Do you believe what you intended to portray or argue in this essay will be the same as what the reader will understand as well? Obviously, the reader here is an adcom. Personally, I feel your being sesquipedalian in this essay (< haha irony) will not be transmitted to the adcom, even though you wanted to use “psuedo-euphemism.” The essay seems too complicated to be understood, at least for me. I think straightforward and simple, yet creative is best for a college admissions essay, but I’m not an adcom.</p>
<p>Also, I doubt adcoms will want to “deeply read into it” because they have 1000’s of essays to read, but they do give each application full attention. So, I don’t know.</p>
<p>It’s definitely a memorable essay, but it’s definitely risky. It’s a make or break essay.</p>
<p>It’s certainly memorable, and I really enjoyed the terse ending. However, I’m not sure if I would have gone in such a graphic direction. Even so, I felt it to be a bold essay, and I hope it works out for you.</p>
<p>It’s not complicated. OP has a fear of public restrooms.</p>
<p>^ haha nice. I don’t know. I guess I’m too stupid to understand the meaning of the essay, which is exacerbated by the grandiose verbosity.</p>
<p>You put that in an app to Stanford? (yeah you posted a 1K times yada yada), You really put that in an app to Stanford? I think they use the roommate question to allow you to explain how you interact with others, so from that standpoint you missed the mark. I think they might see it as a bit crude and over the top but you never know. Seems humorous but maybe even that wasn’t the intent. “You gave birth in your pants…” Too funny.</p>
<p>essay was very risky. i agree with those who say its a make or break.</p>
<p>People do things like this all the time and get into top schools… I don’t even suppose it’d be Stanford’s first, or the only messed up one they get from this year’s applicants</p>
<p>I hope you’re trolling here.</p>
<p>Well, this essay is good. But I don’t know what exactly the reader takes away from this. I mean some essays give the thought process of the individual instead of facts or story like likes, dislikes, habits…but here, I don’t really get either in depth. Could work though.</p>
<p>Although I must say the idea for your intellectual vitality essay is pretty awesome (unless i deduced wrong).</p>
<p>I know this is a very late post, but I couldn’t help posting after reading your essay. Memorable.</p>
<p>Success? Fail?</p>
<p>@dunkmaster… I’m pretty sure it was fail. OP has a thread that reads “rejected from everyone but Cornell and UCs” so I’m assuming OP was not accepted at Stanford.</p>