Religious Essay for admission app - Is it ok?

<p>i dont know if religion really counts as an extracurricular activity unless it is like youth group where u do community service with the church or something…this is really more talkin about coming-of-age experience, not really an extracurricular activity or work experience. also, you might want to lighten up the beginning because the first half gives me the impression that you are complaining about having to do all this stuff with religion. it seems as if you are venting in a way. but to answer your question, i dont believe this essay answers the prompt</p>