Review my long essay pleaseee

Colleges & Universities Stanford University
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<p>okay, i enabled it… lol, sorry about that…</p>

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<p>I think I pm’d everyone so far. If I missed you, please let me know! Thanks for all the excellent advice so far!</p>

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<p>I’ll read it, PM me</p>

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<p>pm me! ^_^</p>

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<p>PM me! 10 char</p>

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<p>Ill read it too. PM me</p>

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<p>I’ll take a look, PM her over to me :P</p>

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<p>If you haven’t had all the advice you need, PM me.</p>

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<p>yeah if you need any more comments, pm me</p>

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<p>I’ll read it</p>

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<p>need more advice? pm me…</p>

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<p>pm’d all =D thanx for all the feedback guys.</p>

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<p>hey, how’s the essay coming along? I’m curious to see how it has changed… :-)</p>

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<p>if you need another reader ill read it :slight_smile: Pm me :-)</p>

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<p>thepapercrane, you’ve read a later version of my essay, after I’ve chopped out a lot of the parts already. </p>

<p>Although I’m still regularly substituting one word for another (and most of the time switching them back the next time) and doing other nitpicky things like that, I feel like scratching my eyes out (a bit too gruesome, perhaps) at the thought that I don’t even understand Ahab’s motives. What am I even saying in the essay? Perhaps it appears aimless to some because the truth is I feel so very ambiguously about him. </p>

<p>I guess these are the things that came through to me when rereading the whole thing:

  1. I first admired Ahab for his bravery as a sailor
  2. I wish to imitate him in his steadfastness and his rather “idealistic” quest to “strike through the mask”, whatever THAT is supposed to mean…
  3. I USED to despise Meville and Starbuck for killing such a character and for thinking he was too bold or whatever, they probably just wanted to live an easy life–like my parents…money obsessed <em>whistles and looks around</em>
  4. I USED to want to be a famous researcher to soak up the praise/pride, much like how Ahab wanted to kill the whale, whether it was “agent” or “principle”
  5. Ahab (and I) should learn to seek happiness in lower places, that doesn’t mean we’re not “heroic.”</p>

<p>THe trouble is, I think I had too much fluff in addition to these main points. </p>

<p>The earliest notions of this essay had to do with me agreeing with Ahab’s nerve to single-handedly vanquish evil, more than with Starbuck’s piety. (ohh how this reminds me of the Fountainhead >_<) Now it seems to have completely grown to something wayyy too serious. </p>

<p>=D Maybe I’ll feel better about the essay tomorrow. Rather cranky right now >:O</p>

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<p>I’ll read it! :)</p>