Suspected reason for deferral, how to fix it?

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it was never of my intention to do so

I know.

Will you have the time to read my essay and tell me whether I should change it as not to ruin my chances at other colleges by coming with the same tone?

Unfortunately, my schedule doesn’t permit me to work with students on their essay(s) as the process involves too many back-and-forth messages – initially with just my comments, but then the student revises their essay(s) and the process continues with further editing, refining, polishing and sometimes reworking an entire essay. I just don’t have the time for that these days.

I find it best to think of the college application essay as if you are writing a short film script with descriptions and dialogue. This article might be of some help: http://www.■■■■■■■■■■■■■■■■■/articles-and-advice/admission/articles/application-essay-clinic/how-use-dialogue-write-attention-grabbing-application-essay/

Make sure to show your completed essays to your recommendation writers for their comments, as this will give you some much needed feedback from teachers who know you well.