<p>w’dya mean… ??</p>
<p>in a way i did make the turner thing up… some other great person had quoted that line but i couldnt remember so i just wrote ted turner!!!
i had heard what writontransom had heard… that more details are better…</p>
<p>It’s not true that filling in space is better. I filled up the two pages with what I thought was close to the best essay I ever have written, yet I got a 9. I noticed that I repeated stuff a lot.</p>
<p>A community works together to achieve something great. A community can not work together if people are not willing to limit their interests. If people do not limit their self interests, then there will be chaos among the people in the community. Therefore, Warren Johnson was correct in his statement in The Future Is Not What It Used to Be.
The fact that a community has to work together without self interests is brilliantly shown in William Golding’s The Lord of the Flies. In the novel, a group of boys has to live on an island after getting trapped after a plane crash. The island is supposed to symbolize a community, even the world. At first, the boys work together well, but after a while, they split up into two groups. One group is the hunters, who look for food to eat. Hunitng is their self-interest. The other group is made up of the other boys.
These two groups cause chaos on the island, even a boy is killed. THe boy is killed when the two groups collide and fight.
The plot in Lord of the Flies symbolizes the chaos that is caused in society and a community when people don’t limit their self interests. The people become selfish and may even create their own group.
The fact that the success of a community depends on people’s willingness depends on people’s willingness (I know, I repeated it twice. I didn’t catch this when I read it over) to limit their personal interests is also shown greatly in the Presidency. In many instances throughout history, Presidents have had to give up their personal interests in order for the nation to work together. At first, President Jefferson was reluctant to purchase Louisiana from Napoleon, because it went against the Constitution. He gave up his interest and purchased Louisiana, more than doubling the size of America. This sacrifice of self interest allowed America to grow and become what it is today.
As one studies history, novels or their daily experiences, one sees clearly that for a community to work together well, one needs to give up their personal interests. Failure to sacrifice personal interests leads to separation, chaos and even death, as shown in Lord of the Flies. War occur constantly because people don’t sacrifice their personal interests.</p>
<p>Do you have a copy so that we can verify if it was worth a 9?</p>
<p>glucose101 can you also e-mail me your essay, the one you got a 12 in, my e-mail is <a href="mailto:score2go@yahoo.com">score2go@yahoo.com</a></p>
<p>Skywalker–graders totally love corny endings.</p>
<p>My APeng teacher is an AP grader and the most difficult grader I’ve ever encountered (great teacher, though). He goes to AP workshops and even they tell him he’s too harsh lol. I wrote an AP essay on this book and my rushed conclusion talked about “seeing through to the bottom in the murky, swirling pond of indecision and hesitation” or something to that [terrible] effect. </p>
<p>Worst analogy I’ve ever written, and the paper got a 9 (out of 9).</p>
<p>Assignment: When is deception justified?
Essay:
There are many situations when deception is justified. These situations include when a person is trying to protect his or her friends’ emotions from being injured, or when a person lies to benefit the community at large. Most of all deception is justified when the intention is to benefit other people. Instances where deception is allowed is proven true in the Civil War, one of my personal experiences, and in the novel to kill A Mockingbird.</p>
<p>During the civil War Abraham Lincoln issued the Emancipation Proclamation to sustain the Union’s moral. However, he did not announce to America that htis was his initial intent, bcuase he wanted this document to be viewed as a paternal, benevolent attempt to free the slaves. When the slaves heard about this Proclamation, many of them joined the Union’s side and as a result aided the Union’s victory. by hiding the true meaning of the Emancipation Proclamation form the slaves, Lincoln led the North to victory by giving the North an honorable sense of morality and righteousness. This example prooves that when a person is trying to benefit a community, deception is justified and often is a very effective tactic to achieve a goal. Lincoln’s goal was to preserve the Union and save the United States from splitting into two nations. Thus, he employed deception as a method to benefit the nation.</p>
<p>One of my personal experiences also reveal the validity that deception cam sometimes be justified. Once my AP history calss was assigned an arduous project, and my friend did not have time to finish it. However, on the day that we presented our projects i feigned an enthusiastic smile and told her that her project was the best work I had ever seen. She geniunely believed me and ended up giving the most confident and smooth speech ever. Even my history teacher was awed by her confidence. By lying to my friend, I actually helped her receive a higher grade; this is another example that deception to benefit others is acceptable.</p>
<p>Harper Lee also demonstrates that deception is sometimes justified. In the book to kill A Mockingbird, one of the town members pretends to be an alcoholic by acting drug whenever he comes to town to shop for groceries. He always has a brown paper bag with a straw on which he occasionally sips in front of people. THe rest of the townmembers all believe that he has an alcohol problem because they think there is a beer inside the paper bag. However, the paper bag actually contains a coke; the reason for this deception is that this man’s wife and two children are black,a nd interracial love was considered heinous and unthinkable in Alabama in the 1960s. t hus, this man chose to deceive the town into thinking that he married a black woman becuase is a mentally foolish drunkard in order to protect his wife and children. In the case with the Civil War, my friend’s project, and this man in To Kill a Mockingbird, deception prooved to benefit other people. </p>
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<p>After I typed my essay, I think I could’ve written a better conclusion.</p>
<p>^^^ the essay seems a little short to me</p>
<p>my essay was weird. i talked about social anthropology and its history, used several quotations, referenced the work of aristotle, thucydides and nietzsche…but then ran out of time before i could conclude. what sort of mark do you get if you don’t finish properly??</p>
<p>well if you don’t write a conclusion, that is bad…really bad</p>
<p>but if you were like midsentence on the last sentence of the conclusion, it doesn’t matter “that” much</p>
<p>i might have done bad. who knows. find out in a week.</p>
<p>I’m reaaally bored and avoiding studying so I typed mine out. I think it’s sort of just a bunch of big words thrown in their awkwardly, and I don’t think it completely addresses the topic in my opinion, but I figured I’d post anyway, if anyone is interested.</p>
<p>…it was the April essay about how inconsistancy is bad. “Is it best not to change our ideas, opinions, or behaviors?”</p>
<p>Progress in a society is fueled by individual passion and commitment to an idea or goal. A fleeting desire may spur immediate action but will ultimately fall short of causing any significant impact if the parties involved do not fully submerge themselves in accomplishing the task at hand. Robert B. Ciadini commented that “firm commitment to an idea or plan of action is associated with person strength, stability, and honestly.” His opinion is aboslutely valid due to what devotion is born from, a genuine belief in a cause. As long as an individual honestly agrees and believes their actions are just and necessary, they will engender some change in either their life of the lives of others. World history is made up of strong-willed minds believing in a cause, and as literature often reflects societal values, the theme often has often appeared in famous works throughout history.</p>
<p>Rosa Parks, one of American history’s most famous icons, experienced first hand what life was like living through harsh descrimination. Though many oppressed African - Americans were unhappy with their lives, Ms. Parks took it upon herself to stand up for what she believed in. The simple act of refusing to relinquish her seat on a bus may not seem terribly significant, but doing so took a complete dismissal of fear of consequence. After the refusal, she could have at any time backed down and appeased the wishes of others but she didn’t. She held firm to her beliefs. In doing so she influenced the assemblence of bus boycotts and other civil rights movements. Most importantly, perhaps, she provided countless others with an example of consistancy and strength to try to emmulate.</p>
<p>Although standing up for beliefs can have a large impact on the world, sometimes it will only affect the individual. This type of consistancy and conviction is no less important. Edna Pontellier, a wildly independent woman who came to life in Kate Chopin’s American classic The Awakening, did not know how to conform to the norms of society. For whatever reason she was unable to fulfill the typical feminine role that others put upon her. Knowing she could never fit in with the homogeneous society she lived in, she consistantly did as she pleased. she was seen in public with another man, dabbled in an artistic career that was unheard of, and eventually took her own life. Though the story ended tragically, she never once based her decisions on the wants of others and always remained (true - left out the word) to who she believed she should be. </p>
<p>Regardless of whether dedication to one’s values has a gargantuan impact or influences the individual, having a strong commitment to an idea can only lead to success in the eye of the beholder. Being inconsistant will only confuse one’s goals and lead to failure.</p>
<p>^ nice essay. how’d you do on it? i’d say you got a 10 or 11</p>