<p>OOS thanks 
but I am just worried they wouldn’t even look at my application if my gpa does not make the cut … 3.0 is really really low!!!</p>
<p>@zonazoo-lol, what year was the 4-6 year? I guarantee you that cypress wasnt the joke of Orange County. I remember Laguna Hills went like 2-3 seasons without a single win when I was in high school ('02-'06).</p>
<p>@zonozoo, I agree with rhandler; your essay tells a story, but it doesn’t tell a story about YOU or what YOU are about. It does, however, show that you have a passion for something. It seems that you have A LOT to tell, but given our approximate min/max length, you had difficulty fitting in everything you wanted to say, or, subtracting the things that weren’t that important, “so much to say, so little time” is what I got. Please do not take any harsh offense to my critique, I am but a student, just like you.</p>
<p>AH W<em>t</em>F IM GOING TO POST MY SHIZZ MUHAHAHAHAHA*</p>
<p>*Disclaimer: To the admissions committee of USC, this is my own original essay. If you happen to find this post by me, know that I am the original writer of the essay for the fall 2010 application. Y</p>
<p>REMOVED</p>
<p>yeah, i enjoy reading these essays and short answers. it gives me an opportunity to get to know who’s behind the user name. you guys are great!!</p>
<p>@rhandler i feel like i could have made mine all fruity and shinny & show that i’m a sophisticate but i just wanted to talk directly to the counselor in simple terms. I dunno, I guess we’ll find out if it’s going to work. I feel like saying “sales department”, at the end made me look sorta scrappy. It was a lot bigger than just a department it was an entire sales force that I was ahead of.</p>
<p>foodmunkee’s next status change:</p>
<p>Thank you for your interest in the University of Southern California, we regret to inform you that your application has been disqualified due to plagiarism. Our cross-reference-analysis-program-machine thing has detected and labeled your personal essay “suspect”.</p>
<p>@foodmunkee- Excellent. Well developed message and very personal… Well done</p>
<p>@budlight hahahahahaha</p>
<p>anyone know any good music? im in need of new music.</p>
<p>foodmunkee, all kidding aside. I love your essay!</p>
<p>@Budlightyear LOLOL hahahaha yeah my paranoia always tends to get the better of me… lolol I hate it sometimes. haha thanks man!</p>
<p>@mxbile131 thank you 
I thought my diction was too simplistic in my essay hehehe but thank you again! It gives me confidence :D</p>
<p>@Dainese “wake city” by Ken is a good song, listening to it now. Also, “60 miles an hour” by New Order is gooooood. And, “little secrets” by Passion Pit is awesome. How could I forget, “We own the sky” By M83. Need I mention “Fragments” by woven. “as the rush comes” by motercycle. “737” Rick Ross. “Give it to yah” Pete rock. “Happiness” The foreign exchange.</p>
<p>^IMO you don’t have to use crazy vocabulary to write well. I think a lot of times it can actually take away from the message… You should be pumped… What school are u applying to?</p>
<p>Dainese, i recommend the 80’s and 90’s. Now that was the era of original music! Journey, Bon Jovi, Tom Petty, Madonna, Heart, The Bangles, The Beegees, etc…</p>
<p>CLAS: Sociology</p>
<p>IMO, the best essays are the ones that speak in your voice, to the reader, without your presence. I think that this was the underlying purpose of these personal essays and why these prompts have been chosen for us.</p>
<p>oo i can see wake city growing on me in time, i really like 60 miles an hour</p>
<p>@budlight - i love 80s and 90s. sometimes i wonder why i was part of this generation. im just happy i got to grow up in the 90s
GO GO POWER RANGERS</p>
<p>haha. is it just me or was the pink ranger totally HOT!!!</p>
<p>she was bangin hehehe</p>