<p>Its repetitive especially the last two paragraphs are basically saying the same thing
The person above me is right include at least 2 or preferably 3 examples
The example is good but frankly it is just one example and you kept talking about it. Frankly see this</p>
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<p>I honestly think out of the todays essays I have read this is by far the best</p>