<p>Thank you all. I appreciate your advice. She has revised her essay but wants to stay true to her original message. It is Discuss an accomplishment or event, formal or informal, that marked your transition from childhood to adulthood within your culture, community, or familythe event in yor life that transistions you through childhood through adulthood. She discusses an event and how her insecurites about herself flash thru her mind but at the end she realizes her true self and has an epiphany. She does it real creatlively. I think Brown might appreciate it but i’m not sure about some of the other more consevative schools. She originally wantad to write abou ther concussons and how she overcame them but was advised against it and was told that those essays are a dime a dozen.</p>