<p>I definitely think fenwaypark had the right idea in stating it the way he/she did. There is a huge difference between telling a specific story about what Brown means to you because of your family’s attendance vs blandly stating that you want to go to Brown because it’s the family tradition. I’m guessing OP’s current draft is closer to the latter than the former given the fear that it’s not specific enough.</p>
<p>Fireandrain, didn’t I see you reference “the olive garden test” in a post of yours somewhere? - the idea that if Brown could be replaced with “The Olive Garden” and it still made sense that it means the content is not specific enough. OP is probably fearing that. “The Olive Garden has been a part of my family for many generations. I want to be as worldly and educated as my family that went to the Olive Garden” etc.</p>