I don’t think so. The majority of what you say about yourself is “taught myself this, will teach myself that.” It’s boring. Could you do something long term that contributes greatly to your community? Do you have some kind of talent that they are looking for? Web design/having an Amazon store isn’t it-- dime a dozen. Where’s the rest of the story, like your impact on your community? What are you doing with your income? Are you attached to any cause? What do you care about? Communicate that very clearly.
Don’t get me wrong, you seem like a great kid and a great candidate for lots of fantastic schools. But Harvard/Stanford/Yale. Strip away the “I’m gonna” and tell us in a better way how strong a candidate you are…