<p>The second essay was good, but it fades towards the end. In the last sentence, you are kind of vague. Ending on a high note is really important, so you might want to reword those last few sentences.</p>
<p>The second essay was good, but it fades towards the end. In the last sentence, you are kind of vague. Ending on a high note is really important, so you might want to reword those last few sentences.</p>