<p>I’m not even sure if my short answer response covers what it needs to cover…Tips or help would be extremely appreciated! ^_^</p>
<p>“I have always been involved in student government ever since middle school. With my move to a new high school though, I found a different type of student government. Student Parliament, as it was now called, was a body of 25 students who had more influence and more rules than before. I realized that Parliament could in fact change things that we, the students, thought unjust. With the new regulations, namely parliamentary procedure, I found Student Parliament to be an important guide to my future. I discovered my passion for parliamentary procedure and resolution writing. Now my future includes a seat on the International Court of Justice, or so I would like to hope.”</p>
It seems like the first 3-4 sentences could be condensed as they use up a lot of your word allotment and are really just setting the scene.
With the words you save, give some examples about the ideas that you talk about in the second half of your essay. For instance: What did Parliament change that was unjust? In what way did parliamentary procedure become a guide to your future? Give an example of your passion for resolution writing in action. Right now it is pretty general, I think giving concrete examples will make it stand out more.</p>
<p>Since middle school, I have been involved in student government. There were all types of government, ranging from student councils to student boards to student assemblies, but at the Indiana Academy, I was introduced to an unfamiliar type of student government, Student Parliament. It was a body of 25 students with more influence and more responsibility than anything I was previously acquainted with. I realized that, in Parliament, we the students could change matters of academic and residential life that were found to be unfair. With such regulations as parliamentary procedure, Student Parliament became a guide to my future, implanting an interest in me for diplomatic rhetoric, legislative procedure, and resolution writing. I found my passion for justice and integrity amongst the motions, points of personal privileges, and resolutions. This experience has left such an impact on me that I now intend to eventually hold a seat on the International Court of Justice.</p>
<p>I rewrote it. But I need a better example than resolutions in the second to last sentence. Anyone familiar with parliamentary procedure to suggest one?</p>