<p>i love the grandfather one but the research one is a little corny to me…
maybe because i’ve always found looking at cells under the microsope boring…
but good job!</p>
<p>IvyLeague- Since I am applying to Princeton, I will have to write 2 short essays (250 words) and one long essay (500 words)</p>
<p>emagdnim2100- yes, there are grammatical mistakes…sorry about that. But, it is only second draft out of maybe ten or twenty drafts. I know I will have to go to adults like my parents and my AP English teacher to edit</p>
<p>Other CCers- I never thought about making it concise by removing relevant sentences/words. You know what? It worked. I took your advice and revised my research paper (still working on grandfather thing). Guess what? It is only 3 words over the limit. Basically, I went down from 350 to 253. Its all because of your help (and my writing too 
).</p>
<p>wow_98, since I’ve been on CC long (it’s addictive) let me give you another word of advice (ok, so take it with a pinch of salt). I don’t know what your relation is with your AP teacher but a class essay for high school is very different from a college admissions essay. My son says that in retrospect, he did not get much help from his English teacher (who he dearly loves and even got a recommendation from her) but since a college essay is a different animal, the teachers were not that helpful. But your teacher could be helpful too…who knows?</p>
<p>I’d recommend (and I’ve seen this recommendation many times) that you show the essay to people who are good writers including friends.</p>
<p>thanks achat-I will keep that in mind. So, maybe my parents and friends (one of them is a writing genius-that should help me a lot but one problem-we are applying to same schools lol). But, is it okay if I can ask my teacher to EDIT, you know, check for grammatical mistakes?</p>
<p>Sure, do involve your teacher if she/he can help. I don’t know her, so I’m only making generalizations…</p>