Additional essay for Harvard!

<p>On the Harvard supplement it says that if we wish we may choose to write an additional essay. I decided to write an essay on the prompt asking for the most meaningful academic experience. Will you please tell me if this essay will work and if there are any mistakes/awkward sentences in it. Thank you for your help!</p>

<p>It was the beginning of my junior year. I had been warned about the class by several students, but I had never quite gotten the hint. As I walked into the classroom and found a seat, the realization of the mess I had gotten myself into finally hit me. I was in the dreaded Humanities class—the hardest class in the school. For the next year, I would have to survive four teachers (one for history, art, literature, and music), hours upon hours of homework, projects, papers, presentations, and enrichment. Enrichment was the defining feature of the class. It entailed attending plays, watching movies, making projects, and pretty much anything else one can think to do to “enrich” his or herself outside of class. I was in for a rough year.
As the first few weeks of class went by, I learned that the class was just as hard as I had been told it would be. I had never been in a situation like that before. I found myself staying up past midnight doing homework each night and never having any time for myself. I started to complain constantly and dread each day of school. When midterms came out and I learned I was at a “D” in the class, I was appalled. I knew that something had to change or I would end up failing the class. I decided to change my attitude.
For the rest of the grading period, I entered class each day with an open mind. I decided to make every day an opportunity to learn more about the world and myself. This change in attitude made all the difference in the world. I became excited about the material being taught. It fascinated me to see how art, music, history, and literature are all intertwined, and how each one influences and is influenced by the others. Homework became more bearable because I enjoyed what I was learning. Enrichment became not a required labor but a chance to explore topics that I was interested in and to individualize my studies. Humanities taught me more than just the subject material. It taught me time management and organization. My sleepless nights disappeared as I learned to use my time wisely. By the end of the grading period, my dismal “D” had turned into an astonishing “A.”
Humanities has been the most worthwhile class I have taken during my entire high school career. Yes, it was hard. However, it taught me to tackle my challenges instead of letting them control me. I look at all of my classes differently now. I try to relate the subjects to myself and find ways to enjoy what I am being taught. I explore the material I am learning instead of just memorizing facts and trying to understand basic concepts. I try to find relationships from other subjects and try to understand the influences surrounding a certain event. Above all, Humanities has taught me that I can make anything I do worthwhile just by a simple change in attitude.</p>

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<p>This essay is way too general and cliche. Why don't you focus on a particular moment in that class that was very meaningful in and of itself? This kind of essay seems way too typical, especially for a high-caliber academic school like Harvard. Anybody can write about how they worked hard to get an A in a class. Show something unique about your particular experience. If you can't find anything unusual and/or witty about this class, I suggest writing a whole new essay on a completely different topic. Stay away from writing essays about school and classes. Colleges have your grades and recs for that. They want to get to know you as a person, not just as a student.</p>

<p>ForeverZero was way more forgiving than we were in the Harvard forum. Check that thread out for some more realistic criticism.</p>

<p>Whoa. I just saw the comments of this essay posted on the Harvard forum. Wow, you guys are harsh. Flipchick, don't be too discouraged. I have to agree with the other critics in that this essay offers nothing of interest to the Harvard adcoms. Considering this is the optional essay, why not just leave it out? I hope your main essay's much better than this.</p>

<p>My main essay is nothing like this at all. It's about building floats.</p>