<p>I wrote my admissions essay about my experience of being the only girl on an all boys lacrosse team, a big contact sport. It was mostly about how I pushed through it regardless of all the social problems and the gender stereotypes.
I already wrote my short essay on soccer. Is it too "one-dimensioned" I really like the way the thing on soccer sounds so I don't know if i should change it or not.</p>
<p>Here is the soccer one:
The grass under my feet, the light fall breeze, the droplets of sweat falling from my face, the passion, the relief, and the adventure are all of the things I feel when I step onto the soccer field. I sprint towards my opponent, keeping my eyes on the ball. Suddenly, everything inside of me is released and I feel free. All my stress is gone, and my muddy duct taped cleats are going as fast as possible. The passion of eleven people creates a work of art, an unforgettable feeling that combines happiness, love, intensity, and strength. Ever since I was five, I've shared inspiring, edge-of-the-seat moments with teammates, whom Ive learned to trust. Soccer has taught me leadership and teamwork. It has given me a system of support and it has taught me how to support others. The game has rewarded me with the ability to pick myself up when I fall and to also be a helping hand to others who may stumble.</p>