Advice on making a strong college essay?

<p>I wrote my essay on the struggles of being a minority when moving from a diverse neighborhood to an all white community. I talked about the changes and discrimination my family and I have faced. Also, I included detail about how I learned and am still learning from that experience. </p>

<p>Are there any tips or advice on making my essay stronger? More captivating? Anything? please let me know! I would greatly appreciate it!
Thank You.</p>