Amherst Supplement Essay Critique please? Only 300 words

<p>I wrote an essay about stereotypes for my Amherst supplement essay.
It’s 300 words long but I haven’t really made a decent conclusion out of it,
I talked about taxi drivers in Amman, Jordan, where I live and how my ethnic/national background affects their attitude towards me.</p>

<p>I would really appreciate harsh criticisms, thoughtful comments…</p>

<p>anyone?</p>