Another SAT Essay (Jan 25) please grade. Will grade back.

<p>I followed the advice to use more examples and this time i managed to churn out 3 without running out of space (although i had to cut the last one very short to make room for a 1 line conclusion >.<)</p>

<p>Smartphones, napkins, disposable water bottles, text messages, and the internet are all examples of simple amenities that make life easier. In fact, conveniences such as these are all around us from food to shopping and it seems that our society has become obsessed with them. Society today places too much emphasis on convenience because it seems that most people would have trouble surviving without comforts such as technology and disposable items.</p>

<p>The internet has been lauded as a go-to source for anything one might want to learn about, but people have become so reliant upon it that they seem to have forgotten how to use libraries with more reliable sources. It is true that the internet is full of information and that much of it can be accessed in a fraction of a second. however, people, relying too much on this convenience, seem to have disregarded the reputation of sources of information, something that is more guaranteed in public and school libraries. On the internet, there is a group of people called “truther” who believe that, somehow, planes were not involved in the 9/11 attacks and instead believe that the world trade centers were attacked by the US government. A common trend between all these “truthers” is that they seem to have built their argument solely off of information found on the internet. I admit myself that, because of how quickly I was able to find information on the internet, I found myself convinced of the “truthers’” viewpoint momentarily. However, the fact is that much of the evidence in support of the “truthers” is unverified and unreliable. Thousands of people, because of the quickness and convenience of the internet, have falen to believe the truthers. Had they taken the time to use more reliable soures of information, such as prestigious science magazines like “cell” and “Nature” easily accessible at an admittedly less convenient public library, they would have quickly understood the real truth and rejected the “truthers’” truth.</p>

<p>Another aspect of society tat has been hailed as a “convenience,” but also hurts society by damaging the environment is the prominence of disposable paper towels, napkins, and plastic containers. People seem to love using these products because they are convenient in that they don’t need to be washed or taken care of. They simply need to be thrown away. These products may be convenient, but in fact they are hurting the environment by creating more trash and requiring more energy to produce.People love them for their short term convenience, but over a longer period of time, disposable products are costly for both people, companies, governments, and ultimately the environment. They simply cost too much to produce and dispose of. If people weren’t so concerned about such conveniences, every body could save time, money, and energy.</p>

<p>Another striking example of our society over obsession with convenience can be seen in the way we communicate through ext messaging. People seem to have sacrificed correct usage of language and meaning for speed and convenience by using acronyms such as “LOL” and “BTW” If our society were less concerned about convenience, we would all be able to communicate more effectively.</p>

<p>To reiterate, our society has sacrificed too much for convenience.</p>

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<p>Apologies for the last example and conclusion. I was literally on the last line. I will practice again today.</p>

<p>kk this is my last esssay lol for the day.
Umm what’s the prompt? I’m just going to assume t’s about over dependence on amenities </p>

<p>6/12</p>

<ul>
<li>You need specific LITERATURE, EXPERIENCE, or FILM examples and you need a thesis.
-Unclear point you’re trying to make</li>
</ul>

<p>you can’t base your essay off of assumptions. I really feel that the prompt needs more emphasizing on SPECIFIC examples like Harry Potter and you need to have a good conclusion to wrap it up… I don’t know the prompt but I’m assuming that you’re going off topic because everything is so abstruse and all over the place.</p>

<p>Prompt 3
Think carefully about the issue presented in the following excerpt and the assignment below.</p>

<p>Modern society values convenience. From disposable napkins to the personal computer, from fast-food restaurants to cell phones, it seems that nearly everything we buy or use has been designed to maximize convenience. Unfortunately, instead of saving time and energy and minimizing frustration, many of the so-called conveniences in our lives turn out to be nuisances or have a negative impact on our health, the environment, or our emotional well-being.</p>

<p>Assignment: Does our society place too much value on convenience? Plan and write an essay in which you develop your point of view on this issue. Support your position with reasoning and examples taken from your reading, studies, experience, or observations.</p>

<p>That was the prompt. I’m not sure how I could have used historical or literary examples because the question seems to be asking for modern society. How should I make things more clear and concise. And if I get to a conclusion what should it contain?</p>

<p>You could use examples that provide a view of a simplistic time without too much value on convenience.</p>

<p>Your conclusion should restate the thesis. you could make it clever or wathever. </p>

<p>And to make things clear and concise, you should reallly highlight it and bring the essay back to the prompt</p>