Anyone want to help with my Penn Supplement!?

<p>Hey everyone,
I've just finished up a draft of my penn supplemental essay, and I'm worried it's too bland. I also need to shorten it by about 80 words...</p>

<p>Anyone willing to read it over and offer some opinions?</p>

<p>Thank you!</p>

<p>bump.... please?</p>

<p>I will. Sent mine in so no copying lol.</p>

<p>I can definitely help you, if you'd like.</p>

<p>I submitted mine last week!! wooo!</p>

<p>Thanks guys! I'll PM it to you right now.</p>

<p>I'll read if you would like. I have already submitted as well.</p>

<p>I clicked submit today! so if you'd like, I can read it for ya :)</p>

<p>Thanks guys! I'm going to send you my essay now. : )</p>