Anyone wants to critique my extracurricular short answer?

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<p>Do I have any volunteers? :3</p>

<p>I need overall review, particular critique on word choices, sentence structure critique.</p>

<p>Took me half an hour to write up the first draft, and then around an hour to bring it to exactly 1000 characters. So I can’t add anything unless I take something out.</p>

<p>Anyone?</p>

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<p>Sure! id be happy to help :)</p>

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<p>Sent.</p>

<p>anyone else?</p>

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<p>Ill take a look</p>

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<p>I’ll review it!</p>

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<p>I’ll be happy to help too !</p>

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<p>Bump 10char</p>

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<p>I’d love to take a look</p>

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<p>Sure</p>

<p>Sent from my iPhone using CC</p>

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<p>you can pm me!</p>