Anyone willing to read and critique an essay in the next few hours?

[Poseur]

<p>This is my CommonApp essay and I want to get a bunch of schools’ applications in by tonight. This is a reworked version of an essay that I wrote a few months ago – I finally figured out the direction that I wanted to take. </p>

<p>Here’s what it’s like, in case you’re interested:

“INTESTINES EXPOSED BY VIOLENT THRUSTS! THE INNARDS REMOVED, DISSECTING THE GUTS,” George “Corpsegrinder” Fisher is singing… err, growling… into the microphone. He and the other band members are headbanging violently, their hair swinging in circles, synchronized and perfectly timed to the music. Sporadic red and white light shines from the stage and illuminates the audience: the movement of the crowd is visible.

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[biology0801]

<p>Sure, PM me. I’ll get back to you quickly.</p>

[crunkk]

<p>PM it to me submitted a couple days ago! 11:40</p>