Could someone please proofread my essay?
The topic is that if you had a ticket to go anywhere, where would you go and what would you do when you got there?
I chose to travel to the UN Convention to give a speech on distracted driving
Thanks!
I am on the internet browsing through the news when I suddenly come across an article titled “U.N and International Officials Launch Global Effort to end distracted driving.” Upon reading it, I am astounded to realize how widely distracted driving had grown as a problem, not just in the United States but also in worldly nations. Personally, I became aware of distracted driving in the summer of 2015, when I began my driver’s education classes. My instructor showed my class a video that highlighted the fatalities of distracted driving. What I saw was innocent teenagers losing their lives and the two words that I could use to describe this are gruesome and horrifying because there was blood seeping all over the bodies of these teenagers. I felt shaken up upon seeing the video and it was at this time that I decided to become an advocate for safer driving practices. I thought to myself about what needed to be undertaken so that future teen drivers would drive safely. I then decided that based upon what I saw in the video, I would share that information before an audience and properly educate them. Anyways, I will come back to the present. As I put down my computer, I hear my doorbell ring “Ding-Dong” both loudly and repeatedly. When I open the door, I see UN Representative Susan Rice. She hands to me an invitation to be a panel speaker at the next UN Convention where the primary topic of discussion will be distracted. When I take the invitation from her hand, my face lights up with joy because my wish will become true.
The big day arrives which means that it is time for the UN Convention. I arrive into the conference room wearing my most casual outfit which is a laden suit and tie. I take my place on the stage and witness a room chock full of representatives from each country. I feel happy! I begin my speech by saying “Representatives of the United States and other countries around the world, I thank you all for gathering here today. Today we will discuss the topic of distracted driving, which has grown and continues to grow worse. There seems to be very little, if any, regard for the local traffic laws that are intended for our safety. It is especially bad amongst teen drivers. Every year, the estimated number of teenage deaths skyrockets because teenagers become the victims to distracted driving through their careless and preventable decisions. Let me give you all a prime example. Suppose that there is a vehicle driving on the road and the vehicle’s occupants are Bob, Michael, Tom, and Daniel. Tom is the driver who recently got his driver’s license. Bob, Michael, and Daniel feel bored because they feel that Tom is driving too slowly even though he is driving at the speed limit. Tom then sees a red light and immediately coasts to an immediate stop. At the same time, a shiny red Ford Mustang shows up and stops parallel to Tom’s Toyota Camry. Tom’s passengers admire the Mustang, for it has a loud exhaust, and pressure Tom to challenge the driver of the Mustang to a drag race. Tom’s blatantly refuses to do so because he does not want to cause catastrophic casualties, but after continual insistence from his friends, he finally gives in as he wants his friends to stop making crude statements like “We will not be your friends anymore if you do not listen to us”. With that being said, when the traffic light turns green, Tom hits the gas and floors his Camry to 120 mph. As the car picks up speed, Tom and his friends lean their heads backwards in the window and make funny faces at the driver of the Mustang when they pass him. One thing that Tom forgets to do is keep his eyes on the road and he is unprepared for the unexpected which is his Camry crashing into a tree and killing Tom and his friends instantly. This crash was avoidable and could have been easily prevented if Tom just ignored his manipulative and adamant friends instead of giving into their peer pressure. The moral of the story is that teens behave as if they own the road. Whenever possible they try to go past the speed limit or challenge another driver to a drag race. They may think of it as cool, but the one thing that they don’t realize is that they put themselves and those around them under life or death risks. Whether it be through peer pressure or self-choice one thing we have to ask ourselves is: Is distracted driving really worth it? Do the casualties of it outweigh the apparent “fun”? If the answer to both of these questions is yes, then it becomes evident that we should implement safer driving practices
In the end, distracted driving is nothing but a harmful enemy of mankind, intended to do nothing except kill. Watching a person die is devastating and especially painful because out there, resides an individual who has lost their child, their sibling, or their friend. In the aftermaths of such a tragic event, all that remain in our lives are pain and agony that can never be extinguished by even the most positive elements, like happiness. What I hope is that by working together we can implement a new plan of action to help our teens become better drivers thus reducing if not completely preventing the rising numbers of teen deaths, and finally help any individual who has lost someone in a car crash cope with that loss. Thank you!". At this time, my speech had come to an end. All of the representatives were cheering my name because they could not thoroughly digest the contents of my speech. As I closely watched their faces, I saw that they were engulfed in tears which was an indicator to me that these representatives had found my speech to be empowering.